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发表于 2017-5-24 10:45:40 | 显示全部楼层
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Task 2
    Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
    Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
    It is accepted by a few governments that economic growth is their major concern. This contradicts a viewpoint that there are equally important concerns like education and environment. I take the standpoint with these governments.
    Economic progress is the key to other progress. Only when the economy makes steady progress can the government have enough money to invest in infrastructure. Road system, water supply and electricity supply all require a robust economy. The growth in economy also provides job opportunities for less-skilled workers (e.g., road builders and delivery man). This may contribute to a lower unemployment rate.
    Some may argue that being focused on developing economy reduces the time and money spent in other fields of life. A growing economy might be maintained at the cost of environment, especially when manufacturing still takes the lead. Factories inevitably emit greenhouse gas into the atmosphere if the government do not regard protecting the environment as a big issue. Similarly, students are less likely to continue their further research in research and respond to the country's call to develop application fields. There is no doubt that it is a disaster for academy.
    My view is that economic progress is the biggest concern for developing countries, since they cannot do anything without money. So it is reasonable to focus on economy first and solve other problems afterwards when the country is capable of strengthening their soft power.




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发表于 2017-8-30 16:00:49 | 显示全部楼层
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发表于 2017-9-7 17:27:03 | 显示全部楼层
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发表于 2017-10-24 12:06:48 | 显示全部楼层
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