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[求批改] 托福写作免费批改——托福小白求大神批改~

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发表于 2017-8-12 15:32:16 | 显示全部楼层
托福写作免费批改~求老师或者大神指正我的错误,感激不尽~
One of the most beautiful qualities of true friendship is to understand and to be understood. Thus when exposed to the topic whether we should try to keep the friendship when something unhappy occurs, I strongly contend that we should.
    Nothing will be completely perfect in the world. Everyone was born to be a distinctive individual. We have different family education, growing up experiences, as well as characteristics, which gradually result in our possessing different values. Therefore our tastes and behaviors can never be the same. And thus it is quite acceptable that our friends may do something that we do not like, because they are not us. If we are looking for a friend who will never make us annoyed, we are not going to find one in reality. Besides it’s hardly a fair criticism that our friends have errors. We have never been close to perfect and sometimes it might be our faults. Once I read a short story about how to get along well with each other between two friends. And let’s call one girl Ann and the other Lucy. Ann did not like eating eggs while Lucy did. So every-time when Ann got one egg, she would directly give it to Lucy. However, one day when Ann wanted to have a taste of the egg, she just kept the egg without giving it to Lucy, which made Lucy quite angry. From this story, I think all of us need to ponder deeply over a question whether we have taken what our friends do for us for granted.
    Besides, a considerate attitude is a must in true friendship. When something unhappy happens, we often tend to blame others. And in most cases, this way will worsen an embarrassing situation. The wise way is to examine ourselves first. Sometimes it is we who need to apologize to our friends. In other cases, if we realize our friends really make mistakes which quite hurt us, it is advisable that we tell them in a harmless way. I believe this is the most desirable method which can deepen our friendship, enable our friends to perfect themselves as well as make us more popular.
    Finally, friends are lights in winter: the older the friend, the brighter the light. Ralph Waldo Emerson once said “It is one of the blessings of old friends that you can afford to be stupid with them”. Old friends are our valuable treasures. They are the ones who know our merits and demerits, who encourage us when we get depressed, who pick us up when we fall down, and who will company us when we are alone. If one day, they offend us by doing something we do not like, what we are supposed to do is figuring out what’s wrong with our friendship and doing our best to continue it instead of just blaming our friends or breaking up the friendship.
    In a word, friendship will probably never be perfect, but that’s a small price to pay for what it does offer and we need to be responsible for maintaining it no matter what happens.

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发表于 2017-8-14 09:54:46 | 显示全部楼层
你的内容已收到,请查收批改报告呦,点击图片选择新窗口打开看图效果更佳
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发表于 2017-8-22 18:04:54 | 显示全部楼层
还有这样的福利真是太好了啊,立马下载资料去
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发表于 2017-8-30 16:14:46 | 显示全部楼层
一看到楼主的气势,我就觉得楼主同在社区里灌水的那帮小混蛋有着本质的差别,那忧郁的语调,那熟悉的签名,还有分享资料给大家下载的大气。
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发表于 2017-9-7 17:24:52 | 显示全部楼层
楼主,是你让偶幼小的心灵再次深深的领悟了何谓造旨之高深、文笔之挥洒。。谢谢you!在看完这帖子以后,我立即动手回复,因为我生怕迟到的回复不能使更多的人领悟你的圣明,以至使这等网上少有的好贴就此轮沉,我担不起这样的罪名!更加重要的是,能在如此重要、精辟而又生动的贴子后,留上自己的网名,这对我的生命,以及我的家庭,乃至我所处的社会中是多么荣耀的一件事啊,请您高贵而又宽容的心,能够原谅我的这点小小私心,资料也已全部下载哦。
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发表于 2017-9-15 16:06:04 | 显示全部楼层
此帖目测要火,我且先行下载资料一观,元芳你怎么看?
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