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[求批改] 托福写作免费批改——老师大神都来帮我批改

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发表于 2017-8-12 15:49:40 | 显示全部楼层
托福写作免费批改~  老师大神看过来,帮帮我这个托福小白,求批改这篇文章~
The saying often comes to our ears that the competition between friends always has a negative effect on their friendship. While with a more objective attitude, people may say that the existence of rivals could bring both healthy and harmful results. Therefore, to state my opinion more specifically, I agree that healthy competition can deepen the friendship.
When the competition would easily cause jealousy and conflicts to two friends, it can be defined as harmful competition. For example, if the two both want something so eagerly that they can’t share it and only desire to beat each other very badly, they might be in the harmful one. This type of competition will bring much harm to the friendship. In contrast, healthy competition will inspire two friends to make progress for the same goal. During this process, the rivals will encourage each other and both strive for more benefits. This kind of competition, in fact, is more a motivation than convention. Instead of producing rage and resentment, healthy competition will improve the abilities of the rivals. Even one part is unable to reach the best in the end, the experience would strengthen his or her capability, which is definitely a positive effect.
On the other hand, the true friendship is essentially built on the basis of mutual appreciation and help. With the wish to obtain mutual growth, two friends will be happy to see the success of each other. Knowing the fact that they each has some unique superiority, friends will keep a strong relationship that is uneasy to be destroyed by competition in certain aspect.
Accordingly, in contrast to harmful convention, healthy competition will motivate two friends to work harder and benefit from mutual help. The key to stay away from negative results caused by unhealthy convention is to keep genuine relationship with true friends who can encourage you to do better during a healthy convention.
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发表于 2017-8-22 18:07:34 | 显示全部楼层
太好了!最新最全托福考试必备资料大集合,马住慢慢下载
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发表于 2017-8-30 16:15:45 | 显示全部楼层
看了楼主的帖子,让我陷入了严肃的思考中,我认为,如果不把楼主的帖子顶上去,就是对真理的一种背叛,就是对谬论的极大妥协。因此,我决定义无返顾的顶了。不说了,下载资料去~~~
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发表于 2017-9-7 17:17:44 | 显示全部楼层
顶贴是一门艺术,“顶不在多,有了就行”,让更多的人因为有你的努力而可以继续欣赏这份精彩而“没事偷着乐吧”,同志们,这仅仅,这仅仅只需要我们回复一篇帖子就可以了,你还在犹豫吗????回帖的同时,资料也要下载哦。
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发表于 2017-9-15 15:53:28 | 显示全部楼层
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